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Welcome to the Sentinel Poetry Open Forum. You may post a poem of any length, theme or style here. Please be aware that children might read these poems, so please go easy on bad language. A forum only makes sense when people comment on each other's work, so let's get this forum going. |
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Calxaed
 Jun 28, 06 - 1:19 PM |
Days and Dreams
The day of the cherry tree whose blossoms dancing down lay a damp carpet on the ground, beside the idle brook where sandy pools drank the heat from dirty tired feet. Or the day we hung the washing line with bobbing Chinese lanterns that gave your face a devilish cast as you spun, soles to the stars, on our old swing, collecting petals in your hair. Perhaps the day we sat unspeaking between bright billowing curtains. One with the goblin market-men the other on a drop of dew, while the sombre maestro tried to give away his waltz. Now the night you asked me for my best of days while I lay cocooned in leg and arm and heavy tickling black, your mouth pressed against my heart opened ear. |
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Yira
Aug 6th, 2006 - 12:43 AM |
Re: Days and Dreams
Nice work. You nailed it, in style and composition - a true expression of days and dreams. It bewilds me why nobody posted no comment(s), You got `em all saying:"whao!" Keep it up, love to read more of your work. cheers. |
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LeeJ.
Aug 10th, 2006 - 10:39 AM |
Re: Days and Dreams
loved this, the ying and yang it portrayed flowed steadily...pleasant read, loved the last two lines... |
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